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Offline Sprite

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My song that I wrote.
« on: July 10, 2008, 12:52:36 PM »
Ok this is one of the first songs that I have ever made so please post honestly and make as many comments as you please! Please dont lie!

Without you
Every morning I wake up thinking of you,
Every night I stay up and wonder,
About you,
Whenever you’re away,
I don’t know what to say,
I love you, I love you.

Whenever you’re here with me,
Whenever you look at me,
And see who I am underneath,
I don’t know what to do,
I don’t know what to do,
Without you.

When you’re close I hear you,
When you’re away,
I miss you,
I don’t know what to do,
Without you.

Whenever you’re here with me,
Whenever you look at me,
And see who I am underneath,
I don’t know what to do,
I don’t know what to do,
Without you.


Everyday I wonder,
If I’ll ever see you,
Everyday of my life I wonder,
If our love is really true,
Everyday,
I love you, I love you.

Whenever you’re here with me,
Whenever you look at me,
And see who I am underneath,
I don’t know what to do,
I don’t know what to do,
Without you.




Yes I know it is short but bare with me!
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Offline Luupää

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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #1 on: July 10, 2008, 12:54:59 PM »
it's great  :neckbeard: u should make more songs :D
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #2 on: July 10, 2008, 12:59:39 PM »
when I'm being nice? it's great. Honestly? its great!  :D :D
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #3 on: July 10, 2008, 01:00:34 PM »
W00T Sprite you should be a song writer is awesome

P.S. can i copy it to send it to my girl?  im asking  because, you know, the author rights.  :LOL:
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Offline Sprite

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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #4 on: July 10, 2008, 01:02:47 PM »
Thanks guys and yes you can send it
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #5 on: July 10, 2008, 01:17:42 PM »
Its awesome, Sprite. Great work =].
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #6 on: July 10, 2008, 01:20:31 PM »
Really bad...

JK! I love it!
Good work Spritez!
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #7 on: July 10, 2008, 02:34:22 PM »
so if i provide the acousic guitar, are you going to sing it??

lol great job sprite
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #8 on: July 10, 2008, 02:52:29 PM »
Sprite, Wow. that's amazing! seriously, quite the side I've never seen from you!
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #9 on: July 10, 2008, 02:58:31 PM »
Very impressive... Always love to read an original song.  Now only if I could sing a little better it wouldn't sound so horrible. :winkgrin:

SEEU on the track! :clint:
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #10 on: July 10, 2008, 03:15:57 PM »
Very nice! I love it!!

Great work Pepsi Sprite  :winkgrin:
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #11 on: July 10, 2008, 03:20:40 PM »
Now if you can put that on Finale or some music composer program and put some notes on paper, I could sing it to you over vent.  The only requirement is that I can't go over middle C, otherwise you might want earplugs. :LOL:
I'm a bass, but you wouldn't know it from my speaking voice.
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #12 on: July 10, 2008, 03:23:26 PM »
Wow, that was terrible....
Lol just kidding great song Sprite!  :neckbeard:
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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #13 on: July 10, 2008, 04:32:08 PM »
Its no doubt that it is written very well. Although its hard for me to think of it as a song without me hearing it first.
But no doubt, you are a great writer who has created a great piece of work. KEEP WRITING!!!! :keke: :haw: :keke:
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Offline Sprite

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Re: My song that I wrote.
« Reply #14 on: July 10, 2008, 05:53:35 PM »
Wow thanks everyone let me know if you want me to make and post another one.
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